Sunday, October 3, 2010

Imitation Post, week 7

"Because You Asked About the Line Between Prose and Poetry," Howard Nemerov, Contemporary American Poetry, p. 122

Sparrows were feeding in a freezing drizzle
That while you watched turned into pieces of snow
Riding a gradient invisible
From silver aslant to random, white, and slow.

There came a moment you couldn't tell.
And then they clearly flew instead of fell.

"Transfiguration," Darren Delfosse

Droplets were disseminating in a frenzied sheet
That while you yearned turned into nails of divinity
Trending a barely perceptible nuance
From pure aqua to nine, inched, and menacing.

There was a time when you really couldn't see
How they froze from something pure to something ugly.

1 comment:

  1. I wonder if you might just write "Icicles" at the top and begin with this:

    There was a time when you really couldn't see
    How they froze from something pure to something ugly.

    What I admire there is there's a particular context, a you and I, and a memory of another time. It's all set up wonderfully for you then to explore why, and under what circumstances the you would think that.

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